He stood by the shop-window almost every single day. Some days he would be missing. But most days he just stood there smiling at everybody who passed by.
I had watched his handsome countenance many times. But he didn’t appear to be aware of my stares. He had the palest blue eyes and skin so smooth that I longed to reach out and touch his cheeks. And his hair. Oh! so perfect. Not one strand out-of-place.
His clothes were always neatly pressed and of the latest fashion. I knew other women also passed him by with an appreciative glance. And he always greeted me with a smile, but our interaction never went any further than that though I wished it to.
Then one night, there was a fire in the shop. And I feared greatly for his safety. A small crowd had gathered in front of the shop by the time I reached the premises. I saw him being carried out by someone from amongst the ruins. His arms and legs lay stiff and charred and they tossed his body into the back of a truck carelessly.
“Did you see that? Luckily not much damage. It’s the display window and the mannequins that were burnt badly. Heard the shop owner arrived before the clothes caught on fire.”, a lady beside me began to speak.
I nodded silently, stifling a sob as the truck started to move. I could make out his one plastic hand sticking out, as if finally acknowledging my presence and bidding me a goodbye.
Author’s Note: I have a Facebook fan page which is starting to show signs of dehydration in terms of fan count. So if any of my kind readers would do me the favour of going and liking my page, ‘ppreciate it a lot!
Wow! Just loved the twist at the end.
getting so emotional!!
@Abhijeet: Thanks uuuu 🙂
@Krunal : U know ur rite. I dunno y I am deviating from light stuff to silly tear-jerkers. Need to keep a balance.
U got a thing for story telling, u do my dear dear friend!
Loved it!!!
Your take would be a reverse of what your post took me to:
Short, sweet and great. You didn’t unnecessarily kill someone!! 😉
haha funny..I don’t think it was emotional 🙂
she definitely wanted it to b emotional thopugh 🙂
For the benefit of all, the harsh truth is when I didn’t post nything for 4 days , my page views plummeted. So I jus jotted down sumthing as a filler 😛
As always interesting to hear all your opinions 🙂
funny… I guessed it the moment the shop was on fire 😀
wooww………. loving a mannequin so much……. thousands of male souls must be crying rite now as i do…….. 😀
lucky bastard……… \,,/
Nice! agree with Abhijeet about the end 🙂
Haha well I s’pose it’s a teeny bit exaggerated… Hehehe
well if this is ur idea of a filler, its a dam good one 🙂
absolutely loved the twist.. and the style of writing too.. a refreshing new tale just when I thought I’d read every variation of the silent romantic 🙂
Thanks Doc. You made me smile 🙂
I just posted a new story now. Do read it at :
https://wannabauthor.wordpress.com/2010/06/30/the-stamp-collector/
Wow what a story.. Didn’t imagine such a twist..
@TR : Thanks 😀
I liked this!
🙂
short and sweet!
This is one of your best posts – short yet portrays emotions so effectively.
Loved it.
Thanks Vikram..its a Herculean task for me to restrict my word count. Will try that next time.
Heh, what a classic!!!
Happy Friendship Day All!
Hmm..interesting !
one of my much earlier attenmpts at story-telling…
hi i really liked the story and not once at the start did i expect the guy to be a mannequin…it was a really good read…
ps the story could have been a bit longer, then i think it would have really puzzled the reader in the end..just a suggestion 🙂
hi.. loved the story and i must say that not once at the start did i think that the guy would turn out to be a mannequin …:) loved the story and the twist that came with it..however i think if the story was a bit longer it would have really puzzled the reader at the end and would have given a dramatic finish to it!
LO.L..very happy the story was NOT predictable.
🙂
i will surely visit again